“Need was the choicelessness she often felt around him.”
You
are all that I ask for.
There is a waiting line to get to you, though.
We are both, I hope, trying to get to the finish line of each other,
but there are obstacles along the way.
Distance is first.
Keeping physical distance.
Resisting emotional attachment.
Avoiding psychological stress.
Accepting fate is second.
Let it be what it is.
Don’t force it – don’t text him first-
allow time to unfold your future.
Don’t forcefully tear it up for fear of what’s to come because remember the distance.
Remember to wish for what you hope.
zaid818
January 11, 2020 — 5:08 am
Dear Sarah,
Truly, excellent job! This was a magical post that really touched my romantic and emotional brain, and I found it to be an interesting quaintly sad piece. I love your metaphor and figurative language: from the “waiting line” to “remember(ing) the distance”. This was a really interesting piece, and I actually found the length to be fine. I think that there is a lot more work you can do with this by just continuing it, but that’s up to you.
I think this piece could’ve benefitted from something very specific: if you’re unfamiliar with a song titled “I Will Wait” by Mumford and Sons, I suggest taking a look at the lyrics and maybe quoting some of them in here.
Great job, Sarah, and I look forward to reading your work again.
Truly,
Zaid